This is my camp story:Day in the life of a camp toillet Ahhhh finaIly get to relax.Beep Beep Beep Beeeep here comes the bus oh no!!!!!!!! the smelly people are here.Oh my gosh oh my god what do I do what do I do.Neighboughr toilet well you gust sleep my boy and move around so the boy doesn't pee or poo inside you.Here comes the first person he looks like he's busting oh disgusting uh uh uh uh I can't take it anymore why did el racho buy me.I look so yellow and browny plus disgusting and oops here comes the lot.No no they are pulling there pants down and sitting on me do you know what hat means...They are going to poop.It smells disgusting and my boss in the sewer will fire me if he smells the poop.Okay I will hold my breath until they finish their poop.Finnaly they are finished and now it's morning. I get so much time to relax… .Time to move around all the activities oh no here comes a kid.He came in and the first thing he does was fart fart fart and then fart poo then for 24 days straight he does the same thing again and again nah just kidding 24 hours.I bet that my boss is covered full of poop and smells like blue cheese farts which is the smelliest cheese in the universe even aliens don't like it.Why do they have to poop fart and pee.I have been alive for 9,000,000 years and I have never choked or fainted for that many years.I think It might be a toilet record.No toilet has been alive for that long in toilet city. Everybody runs out of toilet water supply and the toilets always shuts down every single time they turn of the water in the city.I don't know why there is so many problems in the universe.Oh sorry for making you wait this long Ladies and gentlemen plus children and teen’s now where was I oh yes now it's Thursday and only one more day and they are of to Palmerston North.The boring Russell street school even the school I went to was better.It was called Smart toilet to cool 4 school in horrid toilet the movie.Hoot hoot...oh lunch time yeah ah hah ah hah woo.Okay engough parties already go to lunch!!!!! but onfortunately he … went out to lunch.After unch he went out for activities.Are you thinking how does a toilet know what a kid is doing well.I have got security cameras all around R.S.S section and then all around the activities.Time for camp concert here's the first activity group….group 9 need to go toilet I need to go toilet tell the teacher.They pass it on until the teacher says okay he can go. Then after all of the skits then the teachers and parents who help at camp played a game called pie face. After that we went to sleep.Its morning when a boy was about to enter I hear a teacher saying remember get ready quick then he comes in and does all his work in the bathroom then he goes to breakfast after breakfast we had two activities after the two activities and they pack their lunch and are leaving for Levin adventure park.I hear the bus going out ),-;well that's all for this week see you on the second book bye.
Big idea:I decided to make a entertaining story because i was going to make it the funniest story and I chose to make a day in the life of a camp toilet.
Feedback/Feedforward: I like how your story was funny next time you can make it shorter.Renae
Evaluation:Next time i can make it shorter so the person who is reading can read it a tiny bit shorter.